Sophias Amalgam

[Ryan Farrel]

DOSSIER: AMALGAMS


”...Hells Singer, Heavens Screamer...”

NAME:
- Banshies Wale 

LEVEL:
- level 1 

CATEGORY:
- Skill

TYPE:
- Sound manipulation 

IMAGE:

Spoiler:

OVERVIEW:
- Sophia possesses the ability to manipulate her own, personal sound waves which exit her mouth. In combat, whether possessed or not, she can admit A high pitched, very noticeable scream. This scream can shatter glass, however can not shake the ground or buildings. 1 post, and then is a bit tiered out and typically doesn't use it again for the next 7 or 8 posts. The screaming not only hurts the opponents ears and makes them very uncomfortable, but it leaves a loud ringing in there ears for the next 2 or 3 posts, 5 posts if the person who hears such a thing is younger then 10.  However, Sophia is effected by any of these effects, however, it does tier her out and she loses her voice if she over uses such an ability. When she uses this, it causes her to lose her balance and for the next 2 posts she will experience dizzy spells. This 'attack' really only effects people 30 feet in front of her, as it comes out kind of like a blast of souns that extends up to 30 feet in front of her, and the bast is about 10 feet wide in diameter.

[Belial]

REVISE.

Considering the rather abstract nature of sound to be extremely difficult to defend against, and the capability to actually cause huge damage and whatnot with little effort, especially since it happens to be screaming...

Here are a number of points just to look up, IF you require assistance balancing them, feel free to PM. Anyways, here they are as follows.

- Echolocation, do you have the skill to actually utilize it effectively? Also, it wouldn't exactly be unnoticeable unless you emit something akin to a dog whistle, but even then, those make sound. From the sound of it, minding the pun, how would you "see" the echolocation? Wouldn't you more accurately listen and infer upon the location?

- Erm... too much power in it. Shaking grounds or buildings and the like borders upon high level territory in which destruction is rampant. If it is capable of shaking the ground, it is most capable of actually destroying and popping eardrums, and in fact kill humans just as easily to have such quake-like effects. Also 15 or 20 seconds are HARD to translate into posts, which often takes about probably often times 5 seconds average. You may want to actually use post as a measurement of length she can sustain such screams. And 30 minutes, sure it is a steep cooldown, but also translate that into amount of posts you cannot use it in. Also same issue with the minutes and whatnot with opponents. And well... just in general, you would want to revise a lot of aspects such as...

A) Include a range of your attack, preferably in the metric system, but imperial also works. You can scale for effect.

B) Make it focused towards a cylindrical level as an advice, considering sound can travel everywhere and pass through MANY materials that we use everyday. Also be more specific on the damage based on distance, not on age.

C) Include a more tangible weakness, not something as debilitating as somehow coughing out blood from your mouth. That's BAAAAAD. Well, for you anyways, doesn't make sense, well, unless you explode your vocal cords and somehow that expels out into blood, but then she wouldn't be able to use them at all. Anyways, just change the weakness to something else, considering yours is more permanent in nature when that should not be the case.

Handle those and I'll take another look at your app.

[Ryan Farrel]

okay edited :)

[Lazarus Carter]

REVISE

Why is there the need to echolocate? First off, she doesn't possess the mentality which bats and other echolocating animals do - and if it only functions up to forty-five feet, she'll be able to see everything the sound waves would bounce off anyway...

[Ryan Farrel]

I have gotten rid of any echolocation abilities.

Bump for edits and ready for another looking at.

[Lazarus Carter]

APPROVED

Much better!

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